Mirror+writing

The young girl looking back at me seems familiar. She always has to wear her school uniform to school. She always looks energetic...well most of the time. She has browny hair with blond __streakes__, which she always ties up. Her eyes shimmer in the light, as if someone had put sparkles in her eyes. Her eyes are usually hazel, but change color.

She was born in 1998, at Taumaranui Hospital. She has many fond memories, especially the memory when she was at her friend’s birthday party and they were playing crack the egg. When all of a sudden, a powerful tooth, of her friend’s, went into her head. “Ouch” her friends murmured in the background. All she could see on the trampoline was blood. She has been terrified of playing crack the egg ever since that day.

When she’s older, she wants a fun job, with good money. At the moment her favorite subjects are Reading, P.E and projects, such as her Spanish project. She has high dreams, that her ambitions will come true.

Miss Crawford - This is a great effort, Claudia. In the first paragraph you have used a lot of 'she', could you used other words? Like your name or the girl... You have made a few spelling errors, which I have underlined.